I had lunch with Chezzie in her room yesterday. We watched The Bourne Ultimatum while we were eating lunch. It’s a very exciting movie. There’s no subtitle in the movie, so we needed to listen to what they were saying carefully. After finishing our lunch, we went to Shin Kong Mitsukoshi for shopping. We haven’t gone to this department store together for several months. I was so excited to go shopping. However, we didn’t buy anything in the end. All the products were so pretty, but too expensive to buy. I’d better started to save the money for the next anniversary sale.
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"I’d better started to save the money for the next anniversary sale" should be "I’d better start to save my money for the next anniversary sale", but the "my" is optional.
The paragraph is well written otherwise, but it's disorganized. Your topic sentence and conclusion are not connected. The topic is lunch with Chezzie, but the conclusion is saving money for a department store sale. They don't match.
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